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Her story starts upon a time
when pain was just a way to run
into a place away from fear
and all the things she couldn't bear.

The city sang inside her head,
It screamed and cried, as music bled
onto a sheet of white and black,
her fingers raced to stay on track.

Her hands were brimmed with acid tears
and open veins drowned out the sneers
of all the faces looking down
upon her, snug with perfect frowns.

The chords were cutting through her thoughts,
the world breaking down to notes,
and in that space, the shadows swayed
in maddened laughs and disarray.

Her lips burned with the taste of flame
as smoke alarms schreeched out their blame,
but she could almost breathe again;
that wasn't part of her crazed plan.

Confusion fell to tenor tones
As she escaped in sound alone
And echos marked her sudden flight
against the whispers of the night.

She  couldn't see that all along
the world offered her it's song
if she could just let down her guard
to let the music heal her heart.
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Author's Comments

Yet again, congratulations of 2nd place in =Agent-Angel's contest!

This is a commission done for =browneyedgirl07.
The character from this poem, Scarlett, belongs to her and is featured in her gallery: [link] [link] and [link]

Check out the rest of her gallery while you're at it; she's awesome.
So this poem now belongs to =browneyedgirl07
She holds the right to change, copy, and edit this in any way, on and off deviantart, if she pleases.

Also, I didn't really like this when I wrote it, so I revised it, based on the same character, into:

TONE
Drifting farther out of place,
Revulsion at the vile embrace
Of smoke and laughter, losing pace
with sanity and human race.

Reeling in a steady room,
Marking skin through an acid fume,
Dimensions twist and fade and loom
Like roses, red in a black-and-white bloom.

The chaos brims an unstable mind
Where sound and thunder, intertwined,
Are broken to harmonies, unconfined
to desonate for the newly blind.

Escape is sweeter in a dream,
when music grows inside her scream,
And searching for one last esteem
has brought her home to her black-and-white scheme.

There, she was saved at last.


If she's like, this is also hers.

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:iconbrowneyedgirl07:
Wow! Thank you so much!! That's a really great poem, and it captures Scarlett very, very well! Incredible rhyming, and beautiful language and imagery! I love the way you wove music into the poem even when you weren't talking about music and the way you mentioned what she had done to herself in very poetic language. :heart: Instant :+fav:, and of course I like it!

I also really like Tone. :D It's a little more abstract, and I like the way it almost grows more frantic until, in the end, it relaxes as she is 'saved.' If I could :+fav: them both, I certainly would. Thanks again, and it's no problem about the wait!
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It was most certainly my pleasure.

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